Drabble: If There's No One There, Then There's No One There

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Title: If There's No One There, Then There's No One There
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Denial, Anger, Bargaining, Depression, and Acceptance...via pillow notes. (Post-Wilson's Heart)
Word Count: 100
Author's Note: While the writing itself is completely different, I did steal this concept from a recent story I turned in for my Creative Writing class. My bad. : / The title comes from Star's "In Our Bedroom After The War." Lol, I highly doubt this works, so I made it a drabble.




Sorry I’m not here. Went to pick up House.
A


Dear Amber,
Your note is still under my pillow.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
I hate you almost as much as I hate him.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
If you were here I wouldn’t have to write these goddamn notes.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
The bed is unmade. So is everything else, and nobody fights me for the blanket at night.
Wilson
P.S. I’m scared I’ll forget the sound of your laugh.


Dear Amber,
I took your note out from under my pillow.
Wilson

Dear Amber,
I’m replacing it with this one. Thank you.
Wilson


 

Comments

[nightdog-barks.livejournal.com]

*smiles*

That's nicely done, especially this little combination:

The bed is unmade. So is everything else

Really powerful image.

[jane-hidell.livejournal.com]

Simple yet complicated and beautiful. *mem*ing for beauty. <3

[angelcat2865.livejournal.com]

Nice, simple and to the point. Well Done!

[srsly-yes.livejournal.com]

Nothing like a drabble to concentrate emotion. Yours is very powerful. Brings on the waterworks. XD

[californiaquail.livejournal.com]

Sad. ):

[mich8283.livejournal.com]

*sigh*

It works :)

Favorite line: "The bed is unmade. So is everything else..."

(and I love the icon!)

[kurikim.livejournal.com]

Simplistic and beautiful. I loved it. Great job. :]

[jonne17.livejournal.com]

Oh yes, lovely. You're on a roll lately!

[makeitstopjamie.livejournal.com]

Very touching!

[clockwork-jo.livejournal.com]

Very very good.

My favourite one is the third from last. It's really touching.

[chocolate-frapp.livejournal.com]

Dear Verb,
You are a fucking awesome writer.
Chocolate

[in-a-crater.livejournal.com]

oh weeep no. wilson would totally write notes back too. It reminds me of those annoying friends when you were little who kept poking you and saying 'Amber, hey Amber, guess what, hey Amber...'
Except this is not funny or annoying. Very un-both of those.
I'm putting it in my memories.

[blackmare-9.livejournal.com]

I never saw this, and it's really so well done -- like a little series of haikus.

I miss Amber, too. They should've kept her.