Drabble: If There's No One There, Then There's No One There

[verbal_kint]

Title: If There's No One There, Then There's No One There
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Denial, Anger, Bargaining, Depression, and Acceptance...via pillow notes. (Post-Wilson's Heart)
Word Count: 100
Author's Note: While the writing itself is completely different, I did steal this concept from a recent story I turned in for my Creative Writing class. My bad. : / The title comes from Star's "In Our Bedroom After The War." Lol, I highly doubt this works, so I made it a drabble.




Sorry I’m not here. Went to pick up House.
A


Dear Amber,
Your note is still under my pillow.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
I hate you almost as much as I hate him.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
If you were here I wouldn’t have to write these goddamn notes.
Wilson


Dear Amber,
The bed is unmade. So is everything else, and nobody fights me for the blanket at night.
Wilson
P.S. I’m scared I’ll forget the sound of your laugh.


Dear Amber,
I took your note out from under my pillow.
Wilson

Dear Amber,
I’m replacing it with this one. Thank you.
Wilson


 

Comments

[nightdog-barks.livejournal.com]

*smiles*

That's nicely done, especially this little combination:

The bed is unmade. So is everything else

Really powerful image.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm a really big fan of your writing, and it's a huge honor that you would even take the time to read my crap, haha.

[nightdog-barks.livejournal.com]

Heh. You got me with "pillow notes."

And thank you, very much. Also, no, your stuff is not crap, not at all.

[lindenharp.livejournal.com]

Very powerful. A well-executed drabble is like a gem.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[jane-hidell.livejournal.com]

Simple yet complicated and beautiful. *mem*ing for beauty. <3

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Oh gosh, thanks Jane!

[angelcat2865.livejournal.com]

Nice, simple and to the point. Well Done!

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[srsly-yes.livejournal.com]

Nothing like a drabble to concentrate emotion. Yours is very powerful. Brings on the waterworks. XD

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much for reading. :)

[californiaquail.livejournal.com]

Sad. ):

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I'm not even in a sad mood...

[californiaquail.livejournal.com]

I am. Maybe I projected my feelings onto your fic.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

I'm sorry to hear that. :(

I dunno, I kinda like reading sad things when I'm having a shitty day. Guess I'm weird like that. I very rarely write flat-out angsty stuff when I'm happy though.

[mich8283.livejournal.com]

*sigh*

It works :)

Favorite line: "The bed is unmade. So is everything else..."

(and I love the icon!)

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad you think it works. :)

[kurikim.livejournal.com]

Simplistic and beautiful. I loved it. Great job. :]

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it.

[jonne17.livejournal.com]

Oh yes, lovely. You're on a roll lately!

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Haha, I don't know about that, but thanks for the lovely comment. :)

[makeitstopjamie.livejournal.com]

Very touching!

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :)

[clockwork-jo.livejournal.com]

Very very good.

My favourite one is the third from last. It's really touching.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

[chocolate-frapp.livejournal.com]

Dear Verb,
You are a fucking awesome writer.
Chocolate

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Dear Chocolate,
You rock my socks. Thank you.
Verb

[in-a-crater.livejournal.com]

oh weeep no. wilson would totally write notes back too. It reminds me of those annoying friends when you were little who kept poking you and saying 'Amber, hey Amber, guess what, hey Amber...'
Except this is not funny or annoying. Very un-both of those.
I'm putting it in my memories.

[blackmare-9.livejournal.com]

I never saw this, and it's really so well done -- like a little series of haikus.

I miss Amber, too. They should've kept her.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Wow, thank you! I was actually just about to delete this because I'm not too happy about it, but now I think I'll leave it up. :)

I'm a huge fan of your writing, btw. I'm going to take some time this summer and read it all. I can't wait, haha.

[black-cigarette.livejournal.com]

What's funny about this is that I was about to tell you I had read and enjoyed parts of your Big Long Story, Dear God, and your stuff is pretty high on my own list of Fics I Want to Read. So maybe we can trade, like a chapter or a short piece every few days.

*g*

There's just been so much writing going on for me and so much trying to survive and so much gah-I-am-too-brain-dead-to-tackle-things.

Thanks for the compliment. It feels really weird that I have ... fans. *blinks* I mean ... I -- oh, never mind. I'll hush now before I say something foolish, but in any event, you just really made me smile.

I really ought to log back in as myself, since your replies to this? Will go to Perspi because that's how the Ciggie account is set up. Not that I mind who sees the conversation. I'm just doing some editing to our work-in-progress posts tonight and it's a pain to log in and out all the time.

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I can see how that'd be a pain. In the event of our Great Fic Tradeoff, do you mind if I friend you? The real you, that is. Hell, I'll probably friend the collective too so I don't have to go digging around other folks' f-lists to find your posts.

[blackmare-9.livejournal.com]

I'm back!

Friend away. I'm fairly boring, you know. :-) Lots of blather about art, horses, and trying to survive financially. Lots of silly stuff too.

Definitely, definitely I recommend friending the Collective journal. We update pretty rarely because the Distress Call 'verse is so huge that, while we're writing in it almost constantly, weaving it all together takes a lot of time. So if you want to catch new chapters, the easiest way is to friend the LJ and put it on your alerts list.

[perspi.livejournal.com]

And I'm very glad Mare didn't log out--because I had missed this little drabble, too, and I'm very sorry I did! I loved it--the structure was great (and worth stealing, IMO). :) So, thanks!

[verbal-kint10.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm honored you even commented. :)

Gosh, you want to talk about stuff one regrets missing: I JUST, yes, just read your ficlet "Relief" from two years ago on my tiny cell phone screen in class today. I busted out laughing at the last paragraph. People looked at me like I was deranged. So thank you, but curse you as well.